The Dark Jungle - a thrilling adventure by asus
Tom
was running. His feet were hurting, but he knew he couldn't stop because a
group of gorillas was chasing him. He spotted a giant hole in a tree
and without hesitating he leaped in! He saw the group run past him. He was
relieved.
Tom
was 23 years old. He was an explorer and he was very brave because the dark
jungle was the most dangerous place in the world! He was accused of the murder
of the gorilla king but actually the murderer was the king’s servant Tomas.
Suddenly
he heard a banging noise behind him! He turned around and saw fist-shaped dents
in the tree… He heard the gorilla voices. Luckily the tree was hollow so he
climbed up and just as he had heaved himself up he saw a gorilla poke its head
in, but it was too stupid to look up.
Four
long hours later Tom was sure they had gone. However he had made a terrible
mistake. So he climbed out of the tree where the gorillas were waiting
patiently for him. They grabbed him using their giant, muscled arms and he
could not escape as they took him to the
prison and locked him in. He shouted,”It was Tomas but the king didn’t
have time to finish saying his name!”
The
gorillas shouted, “That’s just an excuse!” Tom thought hard. He noticed that
there were big holes in the walls that he could just squeeze through, so he did
and found himself with another gorilla!
Tom didn’t know if it was sleeping or dead so he just ignored it. This time he decided to go out of the back wall but as he emerged he heard a whining noise so he looked down and saw a wolf cub. He picked it up and saw it had a thorn in its tummy so Tom took the thorn out and carried the cub back to the hole he had been hiding in a few hours earlier.
Tom didn’t know if it was sleeping or dead so he just ignored it. This time he decided to go out of the back wall but as he emerged he heard a whining noise so he looked down and saw a wolf cub. He picked it up and saw it had a thorn in its tummy so Tom took the thorn out and carried the cub back to the hole he had been hiding in a few hours earlier.
Tom asked,”Can you talk like the gorillas?” The little wolf said, “Y… y… yes.”
“Don’t
be scared I’m not the murderer,” said Tom. “Then who is the murderer?” asked
the little cub.
Tom
told him the real story.
The
wolf cub said that he understood and that he would try to convince his family
to tell the gorillas. So he took Tom to see his family . When the cub’s mum
first saw her son with, as she thought,
the murderer she came running! As she did the little pup said, “Do not
worry he is not the murderer”.
“Then
who is the murderer?” she demanded. “Well it was Tomas.”
“How?”
Tom told the story just as he had told the pup. She declared, “I will go and
talk with the gorillas!” A few hours later she came running back looking very
exited. She said, “The gorillas have evidence that it is Tomas! And the whole
jungle is invited for dinner, even you!”
After
a very pleasant dinner Tom went off with the new gorilla king who apologised for
putting him in prison. Tom said that it didn’t matter because he
had escaped. He added, “Can you make an alliance with the humans?”
“That’s
a deal.”
Narrow escape. But all ends well thanks to the wolves.
ReplyDeleteThe gorilla king apologised. Well, how about that? What if a few more human leaders did that as well?
ReplyDeleteGreat story Well done
ReplyDeleteWhat an entertaining story! Good thinking, Tom, and good job on helping the wolf cub! Gorillas are very intelligent beings, you may want to look up the story of Koko the gorilla, who knows how to use sign language, and tells jokes and plays tricks on his human carers :). Keep writing!
ReplyDeleteA great story... :-)
ReplyDeleteAwesome story. I got a really good feel for the jungle. Love the wolves as heros and glad justice was finally done based upon good solid evidence. Perfect ๐
ReplyDeleteI loved reading your story, well done
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ReplyDeleteGreat story- when can I read about the next adventure in the dark jungle?
ReplyDeleteCan the baddy be a snake called Duncan๐ ๐
What a fab story! Glad it works out for Tom in the end and hope he negotiates that alliance. x
ReplyDeleteExcellent
ReplyDeleteThat is an excellent story! It is full of imagination and I really like the way you have used adjectives and adverbs to add interest. I look forward to reading more of your work.
ReplyDeleteWhat a fabulous story. I look forward to reading your next project.
ReplyDeleteWhat happened to Tomas?
ReplyDeleteThis is a really enjoyable story. Nice one!
ReplyDeleteI especially like the way you've extended your sentences with descriptive words and that you knew it should be A GROUP of gorillas WAS chasing him... I see a lot of adults writing 'were' in those sorts of sentences
What an impressive story Asus. I love the very beginning it made me really keen to read on. There is promising use of speech and I like your choice of illustrations too!
ReplyDeleteVery very good story and excellent English. Well done!! But I'm curios about Tomas. What about a sequel
ReplyDeleteWell done! I enjoyed your action-packed story. Tom did well to show kindness to that little wolf cub. I also look forward to reading a sequel!
ReplyDeleteWhat an exciting story.
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